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PostSubject: Riamu 'Ravors'   Sat Dec 25, 2010 4:21 am

Shinigami Application



~Basic~

Name: Riamu 'Ravors'
Alias/Nickname: RiRi
Actual Age: 234
Physical Age: 19
Gender: Male
Division: 1st
Rank: 3rd seat

~Appearance~

Height: 6 foot
Weight: 134 lbs
Eye Color: one yellow eye and one green eye
Hair Color/Style: semi-long grey hair with a single yellow streak and a single green streak hanging in the front.
Complexion: Pale
Any distinguishing features: A small scar over his right eye. A tattoo of a dragon on his back with its body going with his spine. The wings forming out onto his arms.
Picture:


~Personality~

Personality: Very energetic. He acts truly happy, but has an aura of death and darkness around him. He is truly a master of people and likes to think of himself as a puppeteer to the humans and shinigami races. He is not a bad guy, but overly selfish in the long run of his actions. He does not believe in true love, or most emotions, and supresses them down and focuses on just being happy and fun loving.
Sexuality: Straight
Relationship Status: Single
Quirks: - Has a strange tendancy of speaking in rhyme at times. Also after killing he must qoute shakespear.

History:
Human Life
When a Human, Riamu was a simple kid. Worked hard in school, had many friends, nice parents. Sadly he did not live in a simple part of town. Gang fights were every where, and one day was Riamu's unlucky day. He was on his way home from work, he had just gotten a new job at a bakers down the street, when a gang fight broke out in the street. Soon many people were dead and one gang had won the brawl, but they dd not stop there, they began to kill everything. Riamu felt a rush, that he could be a hero, and ran in to save the life of a girl he knew from school. Sadly, he was killed just as quickly as he had jumped in, but in his last breath he was pleased to se the girl get away.

Afterlife
The afterlife he got was not the one he expected. He expected something more like heaven for how he had died. He was angry and felt ripped off, until he saw the girl who's life he had saved. Afterwards he shook off his pointless pride and decided to see how this girls life was going to turn out. He found that he saved many thing and a wonderful person and was glad. He did not notice his shrinking chain. His first hollow encounter was his last, it was an especially large beast attracted to him for some reason he did not know. Looking for him it killed the girl, then soon sniffed him out. It was killed by a shinigami with long black hair, who then explained everything to the crying Riamu, then took him to the Soul Society. Where he said he would become a Shinigami like him, as he saw much potential in the boy.

Shino Academy
When Riamu was brought to the soul society, he was instantly enrolled in the Shinigami academy by the shinigami that saved him. Which he stayed true to and worked his ass off to become as powerful as he could. He met many people in his first years, but was still in a shocked and depressed state, which did not allow him to reach hsi full potential. After quite a long time one person ot through his barriers, a man named Gargun. He was very battle scarred and Riamu was told he was seated member of teh eleventh division, who quite enjoyed battle and killing hollows. Riamu never spoke to him but he never left Riamu alone.

Riamu slowly opened up to him and as he did he started doin better in the academy. After he had he became the top of his class. He befriended many and soon was near graduation. His life was not made to be perfect, as teh day before someone told him Gargun had died in battle. Leaving him a ring that belnged to the battle worn soldier. At hsi graduation he did not take his eye's off of the ring afterwards he kept the ring on a necklace and he took his friends name. Ravors.

Shinigami
After his graduation, and recieving of his Zanpakuto, Riamu wasted no time getting into battle. He was originally a unseated officer in teh 11th division. His personality was still stuck on the death of his closest friend and he never spoke a word and teh only sound he ade were gutteral battle cries in fights against hollows. In all of his spare time he trained, doing no socializing, he no time for such pointless things. He trained and trained trying to obtain shikai.

Then one day he and his squad were up against bad odds. It was a group of five, lead good but not to smart man. He wanted to show that his group was better than the rest and bit off more than he could chew. To many, to powerful hollows, who even against Riamu's hidden abilities of invisibility he could not match them. He had been able to do this since he had become a plus, but he almost never used it after the death of the girl. Still, he tried it in this fight and it did not work, they could smell him. All five of them were badly wounded
and being advanced upon, each ready to make their final stance. That was when Riamu heard a voice, echoing in his head. This voice said one thing, a name. He did not know what was going on, but he knew what to do with it. His expression did not change in this moment, but he cried as loud as he could this name. Mirā itami. He went into a frenzy and could not remember much of that night, but he was told in a hospital that he saved their lives and most lived. Their 'leader' perished, the old man saying he was proud of them. This caused Riamu to go back to his happier self, in the memory of Gargun, the old man and the young girl.

Riamu was happy. He had obtained his first step to grand power and spent most of the time in the hospital conversing with his sword. Unlocking as much as he could about the secrets of the blade. One day, about a month before Riamu was to be released, he was approached by the luitenent of the first division. Who said that there was a spot open in their division and wanted to know if Riamu wanted it. Riamu was overall quick to react and took the spot after some thought, as soon as he was released from the hospital he recieved more information.

That the Captain Commander himself ha heard of what Riamu did and had made the offer. He was special he noticed as he never returned to his sealed state. A sign of great power he thought.nThis inflated Riamu's ego, but he was careful to delfate it. This was an important spot and he would not screw it up.


~Zanpakuto Information~

Blade Name: Mirā itami
Sealed Blade appearance: N/A. It is always in its released state. Before it was a Small dagger with a dragon hilt.
Zanpaktou spirit: A 16 year old boy with long black hair. He looks completely normal wearing normal human world clothing. Except he has slited pupils and golden irises.
Inner world A Negative color scheme version of Italy.

~Shikai Information~

Release Phrase: " Feel Mirā itami "
Released blade appearance:


~Shikai Techniques/Abilities~

Name of abilty/technique: True Pain
Description: The swords leaks a gas with no taste, scent, and cannot be seen. This gas closely resembles that of the one Shinji used against aizen. Riamu can stop the leaking of this gas, but it will only start when the blade in unsheathed. Those who have breathed in this gas will feel any pain recieved 3 times as painful. (Riamu is unaffected by this gas). Also any who breath this gas in, cannot properly sense spiritual pressure any more.
Duration: 5 posts (once breathed in)
Cool Down: 3 posts
Preparation:N/A

Name of abilty/technique: Extension of our pain
Description: The blade forms an invisible extension of the blade. This, though, cannot block. It can only attack. This extensions length depends completely on the amount of spiritual pressure in it. Maximum is 35 meters, an the extension can still be sensed since it is still formed using spiritual energy.
Duration: 5 posts
Cool Down: 4 posts
Preparation:N/A

~Bankai~(Captains only) (no more than 3 abilities)

Bankai Appearance/spirit manifestation:

~Bankai Techniques/Abilities~

Name:
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~Other Techniques~
Swordsmanship: Adavanced
Shunpo: Intermediate
Hand to hand: Intermediate
Kido: Advanced
Others - Name: Invisibility
Description: Riamu has the natural ability to Bend light around his body and that he is touching, to make him partially invisible. It is perfect at distances, but when you are close and focus hard you can see the faint outline of him. His spritual energy can still be Sensed.

~Other Information~
Riamu has a Zanpakuto that is always in released state.

~Rp Sample~
Riamu raised a glass of wine to the man across from him. Seated in this long and obviously very expensive table was three other people; two women, one elder women and one a young one and a man who looked not that much older than Riamu. He took a sip of his wine and placed it down infront of him. Silently listening to the conversation between the others. They were speaking about the current affair of the... rats as they called them. They said they were mindless people who needed to be treated like so and taught how to be civilized like they were.

Rats were anything but the noble families and shinigami to this family here. Riamu started out a shinigami so they accepted him, but they continously spoke of this one man. The man who they had found out brought Riamu here. Solomon Black. They called him a degenerate, a freak of nature even for a Ex-rat. He had recently become captain of the eleventh division and they found it disgusting, especially the young man. Who was in that division, and used to work side by side with Solomon.

" He is a monster. Unlike Zaraki Kenpachi, who you could wound it you were strong enough, you cannot hurt this man. He just shrugs it off with his unfeeling face and is fine, nothing on him! " The young man slammed his steak into his mouth in disgust. He started to talk again, but you could not undrstand him since food was in his mouth.

" Simon! Chew and swallow then speak. " Sternly said the older woman, Simons mother. Riamu's eye's went to the young woman, for her input, but she said nothing and silently ate her meal for this portion of the conversation.

Simon followed his mothers words and in a few oments began to freely speak again. " As I was saying. You could obliterate half of him and give him a minute and he is back up without a scratch. Not to mention the man is a timeless monster. Rumors say he is over a millenia and a half old. The only person able to confirm that is Captian Yamamoto. Though he is still missing. Still though! How are you getting close to the Captian Comanders age and still look younger than most other captians! Riamu, you knew him. Did you not? "

Riamu raised his head like a dog whistle went off. He swallowed his steak and put hsi frok down, taking hsi time to speak. " Captian Black brought me here. He is the one who put me in the Shino Academy, I will not speak ill of the man who gave me my life. " Simon grinned and his mother gasped, the young women coughed and Riamu knew he would not get with her ever again. Followling that up with a nod and a quick thank you he stood up and walked out. Simon following suit. When they had left his manor Riamu grinned and looked over at Simon.

" Thank you friend. I will head home and sleep, see you tommorow. " With that he was gone from sight. Causing Simon to chuckle at the wierdness of the 3rd seat of the first division.



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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Sun Jan 02, 2011 10:06 am

HI,

Please add some quirks, these are just things that are interesting or different about him, maybe things he likes and dislikes for example.

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Name of abilty/technique: True Pain
Description: The swords leaks a gas with no taste, scent, and cannot be seen. This gas closely resembles that of the one Shinji used against aizen. Riamu can stop the leaking of this gas, but it will only start when the blade in unsheathed. Those who have breathed in this gas will recieve any wound that Rammus does.
Duration: 10 posts (once breathed in)
Cool Down: 8 posts
Preparation:N/A
This ability is far too powerful for a seated officer, i would not let even a captain have it as it is. please remove it, You may of course replace the ability. However it can not be too powerful as you have another ability also.

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Name of abilty/technique: Extension of our pain
Description: The blade forms an invisible extension of the blade. This, though, cannot block. It can only attack. This extensions length depends completely on the amount of spiritual pressure in it.
Duration: 5 posts
Cool Down: 4 posts
Preparation:N/A

Please tell us how long the maximum length that it can extend is? Also there has to be a way for the opponent to dodge the attack so please add in that they can sense the blade or something of that nature so it wouldn't be an auto-hit (being invisible and not at all able to be sensed would mean auto-hit really)

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Description: Riamu has the natural ability to Bend light around his body and that he is touching, to make him partially invisible. It is perfect at distances, but when you are close and focus hard you can see the faint outline of him.
so i gather that he is still able to be sensed then?

And please add in a Rp Sample.

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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Mon Jan 03, 2011 2:17 am

Changed the Move. Added in some quirks and an Rp sample. Changed the other move accordingly. Yes he can still be sensed when invisible.

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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Mon Jan 03, 2011 7:48 am

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Name of abilty/technique: True Pain
Description: The swords leaks a gas with no taste, scent, and cannot be seen. This gas closely resembles that of the one Shinji used against aizen. Riamu can stop the leaking of this gas, but it will only start when the blade in unsheathed. Those who have breathed in this gas will feel any pain recieved 10 times as painful. At the same time they will feel any pain Riamu does (He is unaffected by this gas). Also any who breath this gas in, cannot properly sense spiritual pressure any more.
Duration: 10 posts (once breathed in)
Cool Down: 8 posts
Preparation:N/A
10 times as painful is far too much, and feeling any pain that he experiences is also far too much. Not to mention the duration is too long also. If you want an ability of this type you would need to DRASTICALLY tone it down. After all seated officers dont have access to such powerful abilities. Like i said i would not let a captain have this either. I am sorry >.<

Also please add in the fact that he can be sensed when he is invisible to the app.

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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Mon Jan 03, 2011 7:59 am

Darn. Edited. I was very much hoping to keep the they feel what Rammus feels.
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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Fri Jan 07, 2011 2:28 pm

x.x sorry about that x.x (Is also Orihime)

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Name of abilty/technique: True Pain
Description: The swords leaks a gas with no taste, scent, and cannot be seen. This gas closely resembles that of the one Shinji used against aizen. Riamu can stop the leaking of this gas, but it will only start when the blade in unsheathed. Those who have breathed in this gas will feel any pain recieved 5 times as painful. (Riamu is unaffected by this gas). Also any who breath this gas in, cannot properly sense spiritual pressure any more.
Duration: 6 posts (once breathed in)
Cool Down: 4 posts
Preparation:N/A

I still think that 5 times as painful is too much, perhaps 3x at the max after all he is 3rd seat, and the duration needs to be lowered maybe to 4 posts and the cooldown could be lowered to 3 posts that way.

if you strongly disagree with that decision feel free to get some other staff to talk to me about it. (^-^)

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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Fri Jan 07, 2011 6:27 pm

I do not strongly disagree with it, so I do not believe we need to take it to other staff just yet. Though I am fine with lowering the cooldown and duration, I do not find that lower it from 5 to 3 is neccesary. Feeling pain 5x more is not that overpowered, compared to alot of other things.
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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Wed Jan 12, 2011 5:14 pm

I realise that the third seat is going to be somewhat strong, but at the same time, at this time, a 5X pain apmlification is too much. There's nothing stopping you from training with someone so that you can get a higher pain amplification, but your only a third seat, so I'm going to have to ask you to lower it please.
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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Thu Jan 13, 2011 11:10 pm

Ohk... If i get ranked up would I be able to raise teh amount by 2 each time... like 5 if I get t lutenient and 7 if i get to cpatian?
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PostSubject: Re: Riamu 'Ravors'   Fri Jan 14, 2011 3:11 pm

i am not sure on the level you would be raised but you would be able to raise it with rank yes ^^

Alright since this app is now o.k and everything asked has been done i shall show you my beloved:



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